Keeping it Short
For the Mormon Artist Lit Blitz contest, the real trick for me was packing all the juicy leading-in details to the 120 word HOOK they required. It had to be good enough to get them to read further in 120 words! Coming from a girl who just finished a 120,000+ word novel, being SHORT and SWEET may not be my leading strength, but I was up for the challenge. I wrote four short stories with an LDS slant to them and had my husband and Mom help me choose the three that should be submitted. On Monday I will post the story that wasn’t submitted…..until then, here’s the first 120 word HOOK to give you a taste of what’s to come….
Graham hurried inside the diner, tossing a hasty glance over his shoulder and fingering the microchip in his pocket. He had a matter of seconds before he would need to disappear. Scanning the room, a young waitress with her hands full of drinks caught his eye. Moving toward the kitchen he bumped into her, sloshing cola onto the floor.
“I’m so sorry,” he apologized quickly. But the chip already rested in her apron pocket. She caught a fleeting glimpse as Graham slipped through the kitchen and disappeared into the alley. The busy diner kept Ali running the entire night, never noticing the chip smaller than a thumbnail, not even when a tiny red light flipped on and began to blink.